I corrected the first chapter of LA TINTA, by DALAS REVIEW and this is the result...

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Published on Dec 9, 2018
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Hello my YT readers and non-readers! I have taken the first chapter of the book La Tinta (from Dalas Review) and I have corrected it, trying to change the most obvious errors to turn it into what, in my opinion, would be a good start for a fantasy novel. I remind you that, as I say in the video, I am not a professional in this; I only used the knowledge I have acquired over time, so I am totally open to your comments. On the other hand, I did it so that we all learn the importance of good editing, and being self-critical with everything we write. The chapter, as I edited it, still needs changes to be impeccable; this is nothing more than an approximation, and I thought it would be fun to share it with you. So, tell me: What about you? What would you have corrected in the first chapter of this novel? And what would you correct in my version? Subscribe! ;) Don't forget to share and like if you liked it ♥ Music: ALL IS HELL THAT ENDS WELL (XTS 042) Epic Elite (Music Publishing) Sony ATV Publishing 👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇👇 💮 Follow me on my networks 💮 ♡ Instagram: / angela_arcade ♡ Twitter: / arcadesbooks ♡ Facebook page: / arcadesbooks ★ Email for contact: [email protected] __ THE MATERIAL USED FOR THE EDITING OF THIS VIDEO DOES NOT BELONG TO ME.

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